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Scattered Advice for This or That

Step up to the hit parade
keep both eyes on the ball,
every rat must join the race
that's why, they start to crawl.

Born under signs both good, and bad
ugly's in the eyes,
ignore those moving curtains
you'll spoil your surprise!

Avoid falling into a well
don't be silly, or you'll get hurt!
Ol' Lassie cannot save you
from the confinement of the dirt.

The runts will lin-up over there
and try and get along,
the rest of you, assume the pose;
we'll decide who's right, or wrong.

Be mindful to protect your heart
it's the gateway to your soul,
don't deprive, or anyway betray;
or lose sight of the ultimate goal.

Be prepared for every journey
as if it were to be your last,
how one protects his future;
is how one creates his past.

Pride, will signal to the others
you're the keeper of the rest,
step up to the plate, it's not too late;
but you'll have to be the best!

Get used to dissappointments
they'll be your only friends,
be careful not to get too close;
or you may have to make ammends.

Kindly save up all your extra breaths
for your creative drama balloon,
that way you will offend them, not!
for merely barking at the moon.

Treat kindly, and be mindful
of other being's hearts,
or they will bring the brimstone
and fire, in flaming carts.

So, tell me after all I've said
does this journey fancy you?
The answer to that question;
tells me who I'm talking to.

You alone, are the one who knows
if you're equipped for this trek that's planned,
quiet your urges to convince, me;
'tis yourself, must understand!

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A good puzzle to unravel, feelings and a journey of life with all its pitfalls disguised in your words yet they stand out well..
A few twisted Clichés but they work when offered as a piece of advise to the weary..
Hope your journey isn't beset with all these things, there are many places that you are not seeing that can be restful to your ways, Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I like the poem very much the story is there for all to take. But if you could lose a few of the you's and your's, i have written out a few examples but will wait and see this very good poem develope. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Stories have to be told

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