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SCATTER MY ASHES

It's been a long and tiring day
though I will not complain
of watching nature's slow paced way
while nursing old knees' pain.

Before the day began to break
I slowly worked through tall dark pines
in dry air chill enough to ache
while avoiding tripping briers and vines.

Then I settled at a favorite stand
on a bluff beneath a large birch tree
overlooking wide riparian land.
I'm alone as anyone can be.

And there I watch the sun awake
setting the eastern sky ablaze
as if for my private sake
like so many other sylvan days.

It being the autumn time of year
my Remington sits lightly in my lap
in case, by chance, I see the deer
once seen here by mere mishap.

A beaver swims in the small stream
below the bluff this early morning
while far downstream as if a dream
a deer snorts out some urgent warning.

Wood ducks whistle as they streak,
doves mourn, perhaps for a lost love,
from their den tree some fox squirrels speak,
crows fly silently above.

Then the wind begins to blow
just enough to make a few leaves fall
to the deep duff down below
where newts sleep and beetles crawl.

Soon the silence of mid-day
as well as warmth of climbing sun,
plus a few clouds on their way.
Make drooping eyelids weigh a ton.

What must the critters all have thought
as I sat snoring in their home?
Was a mere nap all that I sought
as through the land of dreams I roamed?

At last a loud splash wakened me
in time to see but not to aim
at a buck as large as there could be
crossing the creek which has no name.

I smile, my heart begins to slow
back toward its more normal beat.
One more deer allowed to grow.
The disappointment's almost sweet.

How long have I been asleep?
The sun approaches the west ridge
as shadows stretch in their slow creep
on their way to evening's chill fridge.

Far off some loon laughs at my fate
as squirrels resume their acorn search.
A drake streaks by with his dun mate.
I groan and stretch beneath the birch.

A great horned owl begins to hoot
reminding me it's time to leave.
I rise and shake duff from my boot
as shafts of sun pierce tall trees' sieve.

I look around to take in all,
this retreat where I've spent my day.
Perhaps I'll come again next fall.
Perhaps I'll return here to stay.

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Comments

always had a flip compass...an old silvan? boy scout issue from
the forties or fifties..bought it from the dude who had this garage
sale...his wife and he stately stood there..I poked mongst the finds
and saw that treasure...
had it forever taking shots of the sun and moon..stars..street and
building angles...it was fun....
for the woods....I fear bears.and wolves...I thought my mother
mad for years....but no...
studying them ....knowing of them
somehow she know I would meet those things
as I was different...
but I did love the woods
and still do....we have creeks here
and the lake is devoted to people
so my dog and I can go and walk
the trails kept open and loved by
all...

but your land is what I remember
where I grew up and other...
your descripts are accurate and
real...the deer...the owl
squirell and beaver slaps
all the sounds
etc

there is nothing more peaceful
then sleeping in the woods
when its good...
I did camping in rains and cold
though....was happy to have
a woman along..two keep
each other warm..
break camp
haul shit..

leave early from provincial
parks to save five dolllar permit
and still get shower use
ha

those were the days

now Im city bound and happy
my little trail suffices nearby

there is nothing like
woods though...

thank u for sharing

As my knees slowly dissolve I worry that before long all I'll have is memories of the deep woods. But there are those who , having never been there, don't have even that so I count myself lucky. Appreciate your dropping by......stan

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people that dont even know of the woods...what a concept...
ur right........

thank U

ashes won't dissolve
so Stan resolve

all we've had here lately has been rain. I might as well be in Oregon lol. But forecast says we'll be back to normal by end of week. Thanks for the visit.........stan

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Best time to go is
when its summer
sunny time

the journey to heaven
will be comfy too
hot on mother earth
I thought air-conditioning higher costs

so as we go higher and higher
it becomes cooler and cooler
money saver

Let bankers enjoy
thank his god they will say
there he goes far away

another toy, with his left over booty
let’s enjoy
all remaining come abroad
Ahoy!
let’s picnic and enjoy
summer is for us to fool
lets in nude in the sea ourselves cool

have wine on the house if you may
let the guy go far and further away

Save euthanasia expenses too
let his wifey now others woo
else she will inherit all
that's why Euthanasia
is not making a quicker call

the guy will never return
all now genuinely know
let his soul towards eternity flow

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