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Saving Smiles

Submitted by Apostolos "Paul... on Thu, 2012-01-12 23:20

I gave pain an anesthetic sick of seeming pathetic
Cutting misery’s spleen with claws of wolverine
I threw melancholy off the tenth floor balcony

Agony I do ignore as she bleeds on the mahogany floor
Oh, such deeds are chaotic, maybe I’m psychotic
Or maybe I’m saving me with this vivid imagery
My smiles no longer a bastard, in me look what he’s mastered

Tonight, I give my pen to laughter, as she writes this chapter
No more waiting for the sun to rise I can close my eyes

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

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Apostolos "Paul...

Thu, 2012-01-12 23:38

thanks

Mark for stopping by

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Apostolos "Paul...

Fri, 2012-01-13 04:30

lonnnie

thanksman

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Candlewitch

Sat, 2012-01-14 13:14

hello paul,

I really related to this poem, especially these lines:

Tonight, I give my pen to laughter, as she writes this chapter
No more waiting for the sun to rise I can close my eyes

I think this could be rapped!
always, Cat

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Apostolos "Paul...

Sat, 2012-01-14 17:31

thxcat

for stopping by

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Esker

Sat, 2012-01-14 17:40

Poetic emerge Sense

Fantastic writing again Paul!
I think of graphic animation when
I read this,
or Storyboard art of which I love.
This poem has such a fast tense vibe about it.
"My smiles no longer a bastard!" wonderful
line.

Thank You!

(I'm inspired to write with Punctuation.)

Apostolos "Paul...

Sat, 2012-01-14 17:45