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Santa’s Note

Looking out of my window
Onto the white and fluffy blanket
Of fresh snow down below
That's been left by,
Mother Nature's winter mood

A deer catches my eye,
She has come to greet me
We look at each other
As if we are old friends

Whilst inside my warm home, it's aglow
The fireplace that burns and crackles
Reminds me, it's Christmas day

On the mantelpiece
I see the whiskey glass
Empty, he drank it all
His lip marks left on the crystal

On the floor, some speckles of crumb
And on my sparkling Christmas Tree
There's a note attached, that reads…

Thank you.

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A note from santa, and now one from me, To all members of Neopoet, i'd like to wish you all a very Merry Christmas and most sertainly a happier New Year, with my gratitude to all who have helped me and encouraged me, throughout this year. my love and best wishes to you all.
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Teddy. Your fire sounds so welcoming. My fire that burns and crackles reminds me that the house is ablaze and to call the fire department. It has been good to have you here this year so take care.

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Kind regards, Alan
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Dear Alan, well of course the only thing missing this year is a house fire! Gould blimey Sir, (giggles) it's been great to be here with you! X

Thank you...Teddy

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A thrilling poem that brings out the spirit of the season. Thanks for sharing.

Bathe yourself with poetry and let the world go to pieces.

Merry Christmas Sir. Thank you for your kindness.

Thank you...Teddy

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This has been the year of the roller-coaster. But it certainly is nice to make the acquaitance of so many new friends and be reunited with some old friends. A Very Merry Christmas to you and yours! Geez.
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So I have had a truly wonderful time this year and it's also a huge thanks to you, being a great eye and thoughts. I know it will be different this year but I hope you and your family have a joyful Christmas. X

Thank you...Teddy

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So she is an old friend this deer as she is the one that won me the may contest. X

Thank you...Teddy

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your poem, I discovered just a little nit-pick. I think that you should refer to the [deer] as a doe; it gives the line a much softer sound. Myself, I most always refer to singular deer as: doe, fawn or buck. Yes, there are exceptions, but rare. Just my opinion.
~ Geez.
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Our Chatroom is open 24/7 Feel free to use it for
keeping in touch We have poets around the world and it is fun
to have real-time conversations with those that are up
all night or on the other side of the world.
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I hear what you are saying but she is the deer that came to see me in my new world poem, so i didn't want to change her name she is very dear to me, i used deer purposely but thank you dear, for giving me some thoughts. X

Thank you...Teddy

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Wow, I love this poem, Santa's Note, and the fire! :D It all makes me feel very much at home and at ease. :)

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I see your location is in the flames so all I can say is another warm warm welcome, thank you for visiting my page, I'm delighted to see you here. Merry Christmas.

Thank you...Teddy

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Hi, Teddy,
Ah, now that hit the spot! Probably just what he needed to stay spry, awake and warm through the night.
Wonderful Holiday cheer!
Merry Christmas!
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And a very very Merry Christmas to you. I hope you can spend it with your beautiful family. Sending loads of hugs x

Thank you...Teddy

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Wow, love this.

Emily A.

Thank you, this was a fun one to write. X

Thank you...Teddy

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