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Sacred sphere:
Reaching sanctity
Instilling security
True serenity
Style / type:
Structured: Eastern
Last few words:
Pilgrims' express
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weirdelf
Mon, 2017-07-03 14:17
I reposte
Achieving insanity
rejecting security
real inclusivity.
I like you work and yet have a personal penchant for messing with hippies.
cheers,
Jess
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OriginalRhyku
Thu, 2017-07-06 03:22
Your riposte
Jess / Weirdelf,
I appreciated your appreciation and your first attempt at Rhyku. A small point is that your riposte is in a 7-7-7 syllable format. A Rhyku (like its progenitor, Haiku) is in a 5-7-5 syllable format.
That being said, I have a soft spot for those solitary souls who voice their opposition to the establishment. Especially at a time when nebulous (imaginary?) shadows are being attributed with solid forms and substance and this leads to gray areas leaving the public in the dark and blacklisting those that would shed the light of day on the nefarious schemes of official overlords.
My gripe with hippies and their era is that it seems to me that many hippies exhibited more style than substance. It was as if the fashion was the statement rather than a different and refreshing way of thinking.
Gandhi, Einstein, Chomsky, George Carlin and others had / have their own style but the stitching of their ideas overwhelm the threads of their clothing. Cheers. OR
author commentweirdelf
Fri, 2017-07-07 13:31
just for fun
insanity real
rejecting security
exclusivity.
cheers,
Jess
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OriginalRhyku
Thu, 2017-07-13 03:24
Contagion
Jess, your Rhykus also smack of your political convictions - good for you.
The eminent French philosopher stated "I Disapprove of What You Say, But I Will Defend to the Death Your Right to Say It". There were countless sages and great thinkers before the present time.
As the Biblical expression says "There is nothing new under the sun"
Edmund Burke: "Those who don't know history are doomed to repeat it."
The insanity of war, conflict, invasion and occupation keeps on recurring
creating cycles of duplicity, death, destruction, displacement, debilitation and doom.
OR
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