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THE RUNAWAY FILES ......CONTINUED.

Submitted by stargirl on Tue, 2012-02-21 16:42

8:22 a.m.

"Why am i the keeper? Luke, i don't under-"
"Find Allie and Ben and get the heck out of the country. the fate of your lives and the others inside of that file depend on you. don't tell anyone about the file or that you talked to me. also don't try to hand that file off to anyone alright? it's your responsibility. if i find out you handed it off, i'll come find you and kill you."
"luke i still don't -"
"shut your trap and start going."

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8:45 a.m.

so many questions rushed through my head it started to hurt. why was i chosen to be the keeper? why do allie, ben and i have to leave the country? so many questions so little time..........

to be continued

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sorry i haven't written in so long, i wasn't allowed to use the computer :(
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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emogothgirl

Wed, 2012-02-22 09:41

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suspense. ful.

weirdelf

Thu, 2012-02-23 02:02

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It is intriguing and I want more.

cheers,
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