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Rumours
Rumours
see that girl,
keep your distance
she's a strange one
see her eyes?
she looks groggy
must be the drugs
her mother says
she's stoned
all of the time...
she's a bad one
don't let her in
she'll steal your jewels
anything not nailed down.
she's a congenital liar
can't believe a word
out of her mouth
mention her father
who's constantly drunk
her temper will explode
yes, she becomes unhinged,
best to avoid her
hey, pass this on!
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Free verse
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Region & Country
Northwestern Wisconsin USA
Favorite Poets
Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda and many more.
Comments
Ifeanyichukwu O...
Sat, 2022-05-21 10:10
I believe this is a sequel to
I believe this is a sequel to Just a dream. The title is an accusation, more of a denigration of the central character. No love, no warmth or friendship coming her way.
Sending you loads of roses and smiles to sooth your pains.
Candlewitch
Sat, 2022-05-21 13:09
hello again,
you are so right, and I hope this is the last of this frame of mind from me. I was told to write it out, now I have, and I'm exhausted. thank you for hanging with me!
*hugs, Cat
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author commentGeezer
Sat, 2022-05-21 13:00
Nothing to change...
except the spelling of your title! ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?
Candlewitch
Sat, 2022-05-21 13:12
dear Geez,
I hate that title!!! and I am the worst about spelling! can you suggest something better for a title? please???
*hugs, Cat
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author commentObadiah Grey
Sat, 2022-05-21 13:25
The rumour ? Obi.
The rumour ?
Obi.
Candlewitch
Sat, 2022-05-21 13:45
thank you, Obi,
that is perfect!
*hugs, Cat
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author commentRay Whitaker
Sat, 2022-05-21 21:52
Rumors was a Fleetwood Mac album
That made them a real reputation and a ton of cash. And, yes, I’m showing my age here…. The album came out in 1977.
I agree Cat, a different title would suit your piece better.
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rumours_(album)
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Raywhitakerblog.wordpress.com
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Candlewitch
Sun, 2022-05-22 06:02
hi Ray,
I know the album! thanks for reading.
*hugs, Cat
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author commentJack W. Stanley
Tue, 2022-05-31 17:34
Hello Cat,
I sense a play or a film in here. So much raw emotion within the verses, I would like to know more on the girl's history...
Candlewitch
Wed, 2022-06-01 07:24
dear Jack,
it is a very long and painful history starting before my birth. If you really want to read it I would be happy to tell you through a p.m. (private message) p.m. me and let me know.
*hugs, Cat
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