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Rude Awakening

man who sleeps all day
can only dream, thus not live
eyes shut on the world.

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Senryu, Wake up lazy bones.
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Not Explicit Content

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"All men dream: but not equally. Those who dream by night in the dusty recesses of their minds wake in the day to find it was vanity: But the dreamers of the day are dangerous men, for they may act their dreams with open eyes, to make it possible."

T.E. Lawrence

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Critique is a compliment
Kind regards, Alan
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Wow,
what a wonderful surpise to see you. Thank you for leaving such a brilliant thought from T.E. Lawrence, have a great day.
You may well have inspired something more now, thank you always

I would like to share this with you Alan, and indeed anyone who will find it as I do so very inspiring

A Dream Within A Dream

© Edgar Allan Poe

Take this kiss upon the brow!
And, in parting from you now,
Thus much let me avow —
You are not wrong, who deem
That my days have been a dream;
Yet if hope has flown away
In a night, or in a day,
In a vision, or in none,
Is it

Just the loveliest poem.

Thank you...Teddy

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Critique is a compliment
Kind regards, Alan
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Well between us we have surely awoken something I loved that never heard of the song before nor the band but reminded me of runrig,
A Scottish band and one of my favourites. So very kind of you.

Thank you...Teddy

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lol. It's not about you, but good to know more about your sleep pattern. I can annoy you at any time of the day in that case.
Owls are very special.

Thank you...Teddy

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A perfect Haiku

Our chat room is not only there for Thursday afternoon chat 3:30-4:30
but it is there and ready for all to use at anytime of day come often and hook up in conversation to those across the globe

How kind, thank you.
I adore 5 7 5

Thank you...Teddy

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