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Roswell Construction

In the desert
we wear tinfoil caps
As it grows warmer
The beads spill down our faces
bits of a rock salt rosary
Breaks are taken
when it rains
for sand dune novenas
We drink and pray to mosaics
made eyeless by white sand
sandblasted by lattice waves
Light congregates
on each man’s head
from one altitude to the next

above and below

endlessly

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I want to to believe!
Man, I dig your poetry which could have lead me into pages of discourse on this one,
which is about a good enough compliment,
ok?

cheers,
Jess
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It is a good enough compliment. Thank you Jess.

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