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ROSES

Incessant fervent pleasant smell
How I love your crescent smile
From the vale veiled vision spread'
A view of bloody crescent red.

I tore through thorns to get to you,
And lo, a bush of graceful hue,
How your beauty stuck to my soul
Like wounds of thorny spikes in the sole.

A lover would not rest but wish
His princess here in bed doth lie,
In the middle of such scarcely cliché
And hark the singing bees that cry.

Swift and low, swift and low
They danced to the calming evening's blow.

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This is sweet lines...adorned with poetic elements. I believe what makes poetry so sweet is the use of words {diction}.
This is good stanzas. Your pen bakes poetry!
Thanks for these stanzas.

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Incessant fervent pleasant smell
How I love your crescent smile
From the vale veiled vision spread'
A view of bloody crescent red...

Onyinyechi Cosmos

I'm gglad you enjoyed reading along

Hommies

author comment

you have posted a nice one

keep it up
Nigeria will be proud of you
God be with you
expecting more poetry from you

I'm happy you enjoyed it

Hommies

author comment

This poem made me smile, I liked the old fashioned feel of it and I especially liked the first verse as it was just so descriptive and rich. Really nice poem!

Regards

Lindsay

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