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of roses

Submitted by loved on Sun, 2012-08-12 10:58

roses fade
yes...
but they never die...
they live in books
till end of time
and
help recall the moments
since lapsed,
instantly

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

judyanne

Sun, 2012-08-12 11:08

i really like the first part of this loved

but i would lose the last lines
'as hands clap
they come alive in memory....
wow
how voluntarily'
- finish the write at 'instantly'

just me :)
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

loved

Sun, 2012-08-12 13:33