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Up on The Rooftop... [Neo. Challenge of December]

Up on The Rooftop,
damn, this is slick!
Up with decorations
Rudolph gives me a kick

As I turned my back
I'm sure heard him say
Santa can't land here
with that big ****ing sleigh

Just leave us alone
we don't want to sit
on top of your house
amid the pigeon-shit

As I took down the ladder

I was scared of them now...

I thought maybe I'll work
with a manger and a cow

The nativity scene
seemed to go much better
I sat down after that
and wrote Santa a letter

Just fling my presents on the lawn
don't bother landing on the roof
I checked it out yesterday
It's not fit for feet or hoof

I'll pick them up and thank you sir
Your wooden reindeer are asleep
I'll let them be, this winter's harsh
and my life, I want to keep

So ends the tale of "Up on The Rooftop"
Not so bad for all concerned
I still get my presents and keep my life
and I have a good lesson learned.

Stay off the roof in December.

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Just a little levity for the Holidays!
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Hi, Geezer!
This is fun! So, I love it, but I there a Geezer "I Got The Winter Rooftop Blues" somewhere in here? Big grins all the way through! Thanks!

maybe there is... I'm sure there is a blues themed poem due pretty soon. ~ Geez.

Writing purely for oneself, is the ultimate in defensive posture.

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this is another product of your fancy and I think it playful and well crafted. keep it up!

*hugs, Cat

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Thank you fort the much needed laugh! Better watch out for Rudolph! He sounds dangerous!!


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