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Rogue Luminary(Olympic Pool Workshop submission)

Submitted by China Blue on Sun, 2011-09-04 10:33

Acutely tuned sense
At the mere mention of a name
Merciless winds
Of emotional change

Only serve to fan the flames
Of a fervent desire to be

All that I want
All that I need
All that I am

Can become muddled
By touching the hand
Of one so wild and wired

The determinant agent
Of imaginations fire
Blazing a luminous trail to the heart

As rogue emotions
Pulse and surge
Through my conscience mind

Last few words: 
emotions workshop topic Love
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Candlewitch

Mon, 2011-09-05 11:59

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The determinant agent
Of imaginations fire
Blazing a luminous trail to the heart

As rogue emotions
Pulse and surge
Through my conscience mind

Marvelous job and example of how it is done!

p.s.
we are missing the emotion sorrow from the topic list. Can it be included?

always, Cat

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raj

Tue, 2011-09-06 16:08

All that I want
All that I need
All that I am

i feel those three lines breathe fire in this emotional write...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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