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Rock (one line for imagery workshop)
Encrusted, seaweed strewn deceptor, friend to siren's call.
Last few words:
How can one line put me through the wringer like this.
I've edited it twice already.
Jx
Editing stage:
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Candlewitch
Mon, 2017-06-26 11:01
:)
some good alliteration, too!!!
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jane210660
Mon, 2017-06-26 11:03
Lol
There was till I edited it.
Jxx
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Rula
Mon, 2017-06-26 13:34
Not clear
image for me at least. I think the problem is in " festooned siren" only me maybe?
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jane210660
Mon, 2017-06-26 14:29
That's ok
I'm not sure either.
I think I'll go back to an earlier version.
Thanks for prompting me.
Jx
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jane210660
Mon, 2017-06-26 14:44
Okay
Go back and rewrite it. Lol
Crickey I've sweated blood on this. Jxx
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scribbler
Mon, 2017-06-26 16:05
Hi
I can picture the sirens calling sailors to their doom on rocks just beneath the water
jane210660
Mon, 2017-06-26 18:39
Exactly Stan.
That was just what I was hoping you'd see.
Jx
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wesley snow
Mon, 2017-06-26 17:46
It's not entirely clear to me.
A stone on the shore?
W. H. Snow
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