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Rock (one line for imagery workshop)

Encrusted, seaweed strewn deceptor, friend to siren's call.

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How can one line put me through the wringer like this. I've edited it twice already. Jx
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some good alliteration, too!!!

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There was till I edited it.
Jxx

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image for me at least. I think the problem is in " festooned siren" only me maybe?

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I'm not sure either.
I think I'll go back to an earlier version.
Thanks for prompting me.
Jx

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Go back and rewrite it. Lol
Crickey I've sweated blood on this. Jxx

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I can picture the sirens calling sailors to their doom on rocks just beneath the water

That was just what I was hoping you'd see.
Jx

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A stone on the shore?

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