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Rock (one line for Imagery workshop)

That rock is broken off yet still part of Earth.

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I see broken rocks and get a picture of men in shackles both breaking and being broken.
Probably had too much caffeine......
Jx

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even in one line.
I take it as a great compliment.
What if I added an adjective, like lichenous or even worn before rock?
ta

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If you add lichenous, I see Dartmoor. A collection of sun dappled granite rocks all covered in lichens.
If you add worn, I see the limestone pavement above Malham in N. Yorks. It's quite a famous geological feature have a google.
Jx

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Of a tallus slope in the western mountains

cool!
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Presume you meant reminds

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My knee jerk response was to see the Moon. Broken off from us, but still a stone that is part of Earth.
I know that was not your intention, but it's what I saw.
Strange.

W. H. Snow

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Layered time fossilized remains of natures history,
a truth of before, lines laid out to dazzle the sceptics..
Yours Ian..

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cheers,
Jess
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A great subject, I forgot that lovely red sweet, with the name of the seaside resort running through the middle..
Thanks for all you do,
Yours Ian..

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