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Rivulets conjunction
Rivulets conjunction
Your eyes will pierce my heart
then how will we see
so I will read your poetry
how lovely tis
your eyes are bliss
I am a cynosure of many eyes
but mine are not like this...
you lady are
a BLISS
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
raj
Wed, 2015-02-18 13:11
Lovedly
I think if you do away with stanzas 2 and 3, it will lift this poem.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
lovedly
Wed, 2015-02-18 14:19
thanks dear raj
your advice is wonderful here