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Rivers of the Mind

The rivers of my mind washed thoughts away,
scouring new realms to drive beauty to the fore.
There banks gave way to expose more history,
layer on layer, years of knowledge unravelled

Listen if you will there is a song being sung,
old songs of wayward peoples that walked.
Banks gave way showing people things,
broken dishes, and cups, just life hidden there.

Yet the people knew that in showing the old,
a new life could be felt and there revived.
Feelings washed clean as a mixture of years,
falling to the grasp of new waters, singing a dream.

Teach me to sort the feelings, to filter past woes,
show me the natural colours of the things I built.
Let new waters of the mind run free with my ways,
I look forward to the rapids, that invigorate and refresh.

Let my thoughts flow to the open arms of the Ocean,
there I can be at peace once more, to dwell within.
There inside that feeling of being refreshed and whole,
can again take over the running of my wayward soul.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
Just a wet thought, and a space in time..
Editing stage: 

Comments

Good to see you back. It almost felt as if you were on an archeological mission of sorts. Always good to read your poems..

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

Thanks very much for your visit and good comment.
I have just returned, now a few other things to sort out first,
Talk to you later, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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thanks for sharing..

Alid

Glad that you liked this short one I expect that there was more I could have put in there but later when more time,
Take care, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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rivers... to one's mind
I compare a whole life
to a meandering river
from the mountains to the oceans
and Stan adds on
the return through evaporation
scientific poetry evolution

the journey yours
and
my everlasting sojourn
are on and on
and
onnnnnnnnnnn

loved

I wrote a longer one with the complete cycle a while back ,
when time permits I will look it out for you,
Meanwhile you take care of yourself,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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I really enjoyed this thought experiment, I think it can be improved on a little, maybe I can offer some suggestions tomorrow night I am sick as a dog I got food poisoning today I went out for lunch and got bit lol

be back tomorrow night

love always Jayne x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

There's no panic about improving the write,
when time permits I will look into what to do.
You look after you and stop eating bad things.
Yours as usual, Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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your thoughts will never be washed away by time but established

Lovely to have you visit and a comment that will be thought about,
Take care,
Yours Ian . T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

author comment

really good as always
I enjoyed
what else to say

Emina
Maybe it's better to stay completely within
as fire hides in metal
as water hides in rock.
Rumi

Great to walk with you for a while,
I shall have a bit more time soon to try a better one or two,
we will see,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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