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The River Runs

Spirited away into a void,
suspended in nothingness.

Moving pictures
of life flash by,
momentous moments
pause in transit,
allowing one
last celebration
of remembrance.

Instances of sorrow
smear sight,
the wretchedness tears
new holes in regret,
stamping days
that cross the soul
with melancholy.

Closing the shutters
of consciousness,
slipping into the
divine form,
swimming through
the dying river,
finally letting go

I slide into waiting arms
as Styx carries me home.

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Have you ever watched Spirited Away?

Every verse in this poem reminded me of a scene in that movie - and it all seemed to move right with the plot. I may have lost the real meaning of this poem, because I just couldn't think of anything other than Spirited Away.

But on rereading, the poem has a darker tone. Not a bad one.

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No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot

http://www.wsgeorge.com/

Never even heard of it before but you've piqued my interest I have a great love of film and TV I have over five thousand movies and TV series LOL I know its an addiction, my book collection is going to rival a Library soon I buy poetry books old and new all the time haven't read them all yet but I hope to have many more years to enjoy them :)

There is a dark tone to this poem it just simmers under the surface, the ending should tell of the writers mind at the close.

thanks for the read and your thoughts

love JC xxx

P.S this poem is in reality about death and the journey to it... don't know if that is anything like the movie

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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In a way, yes. It is a Japanese fantasy animation by Hayao Miyazaki, about a little girl who discovers the spirit world.

Although it doesn't speak explicitly about death (not that I remember) there is a lot of symbolism in it.

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No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot

http://www.wsgeorge.com/

Ahhh I am sure I would enjoy it I will have a look and see if I cant find it, this is a journey in part through the spirit world of life that leads to death, I got the idea for this one when I was laying in bed last night don't ask where it came from...

Thanks for the heads up I am interested to see it now :D

love JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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i missed out this one! its beautiful, jayne. good job

Alid

I am very happy you liked it

love and hugs JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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As you know from my talks with Sadie I have learned much of the Spirit world.
They rarely come talk to me now, but I know that they are there and would come to my think if I need them.
The lines of your poem:-
slipping into the
divine form,
This is touching their ways and how they are, it seems that as you rest you are being told of many things.
(Yet you hold onto those things that have hurt you, which are expressed in the other lines of this poem, but I will say they are slowly brushing aside the hurt with gossamer brooms, and starlight thoughts), lovely.
I let them talk through my think, and sometimes write as you will notice what they want to say, helps with poetry but they don't like punctuation or rhyme but I change things to conform to what I think others would like to read.
It is good to be classified as Mad by Wesley it gives me a strange freedom LOL.
When I see that write from you that flows with love of ones own convictions and that freedom not felt before, I shall be very Happy.
You take care of all your ways, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I am riding a roller coaster of emotions as each day passes some are good some not so good, but I am getting there I am just trying to go with the flow but sometimes it feels like I am going against it, there will come a day(I hope not too far away) when that write falls from my pen, until then I guess y'all will have to bear with me a I write out the hurt and sorrow as best I can, Thanks for always being there hun your a good man I hope you know this.

Mad ? we are all a bit mad I think ;) giggle

much love always JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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is always top notch, with things that have to be read and re-read.. Club Special

Ahhh thank you for that :) I very much appreciate your read and comment.

love JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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This has a deep emotional effect on me - you know why, heehee. I haven't cross the Styx yet - just seen it from pretty close up! - but when I do, I strongly suspect it will feel like what you've written here.

Concerning lyng in bed - some of my own poetry comes from the edge of dreams.

Do you remember what I said a while back, about good poetry bringing forth so much more than merely its words?
Yah, most very excellent.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

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I have had some moments when I was ill that I cant still understand maybe this is something I brought back with me, I compose a lot of poems in bed I think of lines and make small memos on my phone in the dark so I don't forget lol... I have forgotten more good lines right on the cusp of sleep than I have remembered and written, I like to think at some point you rethink them again lol

I do remember you saying that, that's a high compliment Bro' I really appreciate it, it means the world coming from you

love and hugs JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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Haven't connected for so long!

This made me sigh...the letting go part was quite soothing. I seem to have lost my writing mojo at the moment, so i'm a little jealous you can turn out these classy poems. I always try and read your work even if i don't comment.
Ells xx
Namaste

Its been a long while hun, hope your well :) lots has happened since we last spoke its really come out a lot in my writing, I sometimes hit a brick wall in my mind and usually within a day I am back to normal, I don't stress sometimes the brain needs a rest ...

I haven't been able to comment much I haven't been myself for a little while I broke up with my partner and its been a rough few weeks, I will be ok I am slowly coming round :)

I hope your Mojo starts working for you, try just clearing your mind in the quiet sometimes that works for me start with a blank slate and build some words on it

take care hun thanks for the read and the comment its much appreciated

Namaste JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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Big hugs....you're a class act...sorry for your relationship going tits up. Been there...now blissfully happy with a chap that deserves me! LOL. Hang in sister. Always welcome here if you want some Brit action! LOL

Ells xxxx

Life is what it is eh ? I am not really looking for anyone, I might even take myself off overseas for a holiday later on who knows and I might just take you up on that offer lol big hugs

love JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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two of us have already compared
lives to a running river ,
a friend in Alabama
and I myself,
You are the third one
we all are now runners up
the river never returns
we all know that
memories fade
we all know that
but the way you describe
life
as a flowing river
none has done so ever

loved

I would love to read your river poem, is it posted here anywhere ? That's a very nice compliment hun thank you so much its appreciated...

smile

love JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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Growing on me...

Ells x

Thanks hun

love JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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