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Ride The High Wind

Falling
stumbling
through the darkness
of another sleepless night
emotions seeping into
all I attempt to write

Silence surrounding
solitude abounding
engulfs me where
none is what it seems
passions ride the high wind

Grasping
Clutching
tendrils of the forgotten
await on the precipice
of one conscience thought

Binding
reminding
reality breaks a heart
yet still
passions ride the high wind
tearing me apart

Clutching
touching
the mist of journey's
end

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I like how you've structured this piece though the second stanza has a bit deviated than the others. I have to admit though I read it more than twice and still feel there's a lot need to grasp.
Engulf...should it be engulfs or I am missing something?

Shall make sure to see what others have to say.

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should be engulfs thank you
lol I just might reveal the mmeaning when others have commented on it
thank you for taking the time to read
hint: the answer is obvious

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

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Hi lynn, good poem, I only think it should be shortened a little by joining some lines together. I think I've said this before...lol.
I take it to mean the isolation you feel during this pandemic. We don't know when it will end. Sad...I've also developed sleep disorders, never had them before.
I'll drop by again. Dare I say "cheer up"?

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Know then thyself, presume not God to scan,
The proper study of Mankind is Man.
Plac’d on this isthmus of a middle state,
A being darkly wise, and rudely great….

An Essay On Man, III, Alexander Pope.

Thanks so much for the visit. When freestyle is written each though has it's own line
lol no has nothing to do with the pandemic
Hint: lets see now , it is about me read deeper into it

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

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like there is a need for some companionship. Snow on the roof, but fire in the furnace.. ~ Gee.
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Honest critique and comments shouldn't hurt.
It's why we are here, to get better at our craft.

Perhaps but a little more than that
thanks for the read and trying to guess lol fyi sir gee no snow grey

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

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is it your muse who wont let you sleep? lol i love these type poems i will come back to see, i also read it a few times you have a truly beautiful pen hand

Thank you...Teddy

and you are always so generous with your compliments
Gee almost had it
think I will wait just a bit longer
no not my muse my muse is always asleep lol

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

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here is what you were patiently waiting for
stanza 1-selff explanatory
2-empty and alone at the same time the passion for life and living is strong
3-the thought of have I forgotten how to give to another
4-wanting to try but afraid of being hurt again
5-I've given up trying

so there you have the why behind the poem

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

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Thank you for that, I only hope that you never give up looking for true love, it's hard and it comes in all shapes and sizes.
What would we have to write about without it! Lovely lovely

Thank you...Teddy

Thank you

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

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