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A RHYKU
South born rain washes the night
tomorrow's forecast : clear and cold
I sit here beneath a dim light
as year and I both become old
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Rula
Sun, 2012-12-23 09:32
hello Stan
No critique . I thought it is a well done piece.Really creative!
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scribbler
Sun, 2012-12-23 14:26
Hi Rula
I'm pleased you enjoyed this write and form................stan
author commentweirdelf
Mon, 2012-12-24 13:07
Elegant.
and subtly profound
cheers,
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scribbler
Mon, 2012-12-24 17:52
Hi Jess
Brevity in words with maximum conveyence is part of what I aimed for when I developed this form. Thanks for taking the time to read and leave kind evaluation...............stan
author commentIan.T
Mon, 2012-12-24 16:36
Stan
To age is to feel the past
The more past you feel the older you are
Step into the future with a love
And I am not going to suggest any
Great piece of writing there lol
Yours Ian.Txxx
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
scribbler
Mon, 2012-12-24 17:53
Greetings Ian
Thank you, I'm pleased you enjoyed it...............stan
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