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A RHYKU

South born rain washes the night
tomorrow's forecast : clear and cold
I sit here beneath a dim light
as year and I both become old

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No critique . I thought it is a well done piece.Really creative!

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

I'm pleased you enjoyed this write and form................stan

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and subtly profound

cheers,
Jess
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Brevity in words with maximum conveyence is part of what I aimed for when I developed this form. Thanks for taking the time to read and leave kind evaluation...............stan

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To age is to feel the past
The more past you feel the older you are
Step into the future with a love
And I am not going to suggest any
Great piece of writing there lol
Yours Ian.Txxx

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Thank you, I'm pleased you enjoyed it...............stan

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