Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.
REUNION
Be assured
now that I've returned
I missed you
......I missed you
Far too many a morning
and day and night
I have been where you are not
but you were not forgot
I recalled and missed
your oh so gentle touch
upon my rough and weathered hide
and even my sparse white hair
( what little is still there )
Your fragrance.....missed
ever changing
from day to day
or even hour to hour
like an ongoing play.
And the way you move
effortlessly through my world.
Your passages betrayed
by grass disturbed
or perhaps a slim frond left swaying.
Even your conversation
often hard to understand,
sometimes the merest whisper
other times a near roar.
But now at last I'm back
and I open my arms
( which seem so inadequet )
so as to embrace once more
the untamed forest wind.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
wellll.........I had a choice between another rhyming poem and this attempt at free verse. So go ahead and let me know how bad of a free verse this is lol..............stan
Editing stage:
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.
Comments
Geezer
Mon, 2017-04-03 23:15
Very good...
I applaud your skill in braiding the rhyme to the free verse. felt a distinct rhythm all the way through.
Not bad! Really pretty damn good! ~ Gee.
.
There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
scribbler
Thu, 2017-04-06 10:45
Hi Gee
Thanks. I can never tell if my forays into free verse are any good. Hmmm....for that matter the same holds true for all my scribbles so I must depend on others' opinions lol.............stan
author commentjane210660
Tue, 2017-04-04 04:42
Very much enjoyed.
Very much enjoyed.
I thought you were talking to Spring as I read through, but see your perspective.
A lovely, heart warming, uplifting poem. Jx
------------
Remember we are a workshop site.
Don't forget to offer critique on poems you read.
scribbler
Thu, 2017-04-06 10:47
Hi Jane
This one is a bit personal as it's about my being able to get out and about after being immobilized for a few months due to knee replacement.Glad you liked it and thanks for the visit..........stan
author commentlovedly
Wed, 2017-04-05 16:43
( what little is still there )
lost in the wind
some where
but where
and
why inadequate
I wonder Stan
you r just 62
a new old age brand
going with the wind
hand in hand
lovedly
Wed, 2017-04-05 16:43
( what little is still there )
lost in the wind
some where
but where
and
why inadequate
I wonder Stan
you r just 62
a new old age brand
going with the wind
hand in hand
scribbler
Thu, 2017-04-06 10:49
Howdy
Now I'm 63.....time pauses for nobody lol. Inadequate in both spelling and ability to hold the wind. Appreciate your dropping by...........stan
author comment