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Reunion

The night spreads its wings of darkness
across the heavens- above
as the moon's graceful light returns,
greeting the mistress earth,
joined by the clustered stars,
the twinkling diamonds of paradise,
listening to the song of the crickets
which breaks the silence
in the air.

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Comments

A nice scene indeed. I could see and hear.
If I might suggest, in the line
"across the heavens above"........ may be adding a hyphen or just a comma
across the heavens-above
or simply say
across the above heavens.

I also think you need to add "the cricket" as you are talking about a general species.

As for the title I like this one as is, but I would like to share an oldie of mine on the same topic... I called it "Divinity Nuptials"

I don't mind borrowing my title. :)

Thanks for sharing.

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thank you for the visit, comment and suggestions. I've done the edit.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
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