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Resurrection

A sworded conception
Doomed from the start
Your love was too strong

Lurid in its direction
Just a diversion in your mind
Yet blindly I went on

When you left
my life shattered into Infinity,
couldn't breathe without you

(chorus)
Ignite a carnal resurrection
Let me live again
Breathe

I am hanging on,
asphyxiating, on raw emotion.
Restore my voice.

Passion is my affliction
A terrible addiction
My drug of choice

Love has me in a choke hold
Inhale, exhale,
let me breathe again

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Thank you to HS for helping me with this version
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Thank you, that is very kind of you. Why have given up writing ?

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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I'd love to hear it!

Love Mand xxxxxxxx

I'm glad that you like it.

I couldn't sing if my life depended on it, my singing voice would make dogs howl LOL. So someone else would have to perform it.

Love Lou xx

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Lou,

great song structure now, with your verses, two bridges and chorus. The extra verse you've added rounds it off really well. I like the change to the chorus better now too.

I look forward to you singing this one to me via MSN Messenger...I of course will take a copy of your performance and add it to the website for all to hear!!!...only kidding you my friend.

regards,

HS

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With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me.

i'm glad you approve, thanks for helping me with this.

Trust me you don't want me to sing, not if you value your hearing.

Lou.

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I hope that someone does sing it ! I'm not volunteering , my voice isn't that good either. [Of course after a few drinks, and some Kareoke, who cares?] But, I liked the raw emotion. Great work ! ~ love ya, Gee xxx

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love lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Thanks Xena , your welcome to sing it, but not country style. Although I do love Patsy Cline, her voice and songs, make me cry.

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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Nothing to criticize.
I love the dichotomy between love and physical desire that I feel in reading this, and the helplessness and desperation of need.
Excellent poem, let alone song.

Respectfully, Jim

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Thank you .

Love and desire, can be heaven and hell.

lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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