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(repost) shadow

I wish I was as pretty as my shadow
I wish I was as easy to hide
I wish it was easy to tell the truth
and harder to tell that I lied.

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Hits a few home truths for quite a few people I think.

You have talent, it needs work but it is there. That is why I got so furious with you about the last poem of yours I commented on.

cheers,
Jess
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