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Repeat After Me...

Submitted by Geezer on Thu, 2022-06-16 11:18

Tomorrow will be a better day
I sincerely hope it's true
'Cause I don't know what to say
Thought I taught you what to do

The same mistakes o'er and o'er
No lessons have you learned
Parrot sessions, repeat to me
But same errors have returned

What are you thinking? I must ask
Or don't you think at all?
I'm truly hurt that lessons taught
Upon deaf ears must fall

Oh Lord, this is not my day
I'm tired now, must rest
I'll return tomorrow, say again
And then give you the test

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Structured: Western
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Contest: 
Neopoem Of The Week Contest June 12 to 18 2022
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Candlewitch

Fri, 2022-06-17 07:35

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good title, the pacing is great it bounced right along with your frustration, LOL! you do know that she is either nuts, or else just giving lip service...the definition of crazy is: to do the same thing over and over expecting different results is crazy...

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Geezer

Fri, 2022-06-17 08:37

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have such ingrained habits that it is very hard for them to change. A good teacher does not despair and returns to give another lesson to those that try. [Ok, maybe they do despair], but come back to give another lesson anyway. LoL
Thank you for your continued reading and comments. Hugs, from the boys ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

Sat, 2022-06-18 06:26

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the first step is: a person has to want to change (I know this one first hand) and even then change usually happens slowly, lol!

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Geezer

Sat, 2022-06-18 10:08

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there has to be some wanting to be changed. Like bringing the horse to water, but you can't make them drink if they aren't thirsty. Hugs from the boys, ~ Geez.
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lovedly

Sat, 2022-06-18 16:54

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bringing ////
take the horse to water, but you can't make x th x
'em drink

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