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Remember the times we shared feelings,we had a sense of fulfilment.
Although now we have become strangers with each other's deep secrets,hidden under the carpet of sadness and nostalgia.
Remember we once shared feelings Surrounded by butterflies and songs we danced to and followed every rhythm.

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of my title?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Not Explicit Content


thank you for the breath of fresh air you included with this piece of prose. I liked it very much. the nostalgia is good. welcome to Neopoet, may you and your poetry find a home here! I have just one suggestion: in this line,( feelings,we) use a space between the comma and "we" and in this: (secrets,hidden) a space between the comma and (hidden) for a smoother read.

if there is any way I can help you, I will, or at least point you in the direction of someone who can.

*hugs, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

in total agreement with Cat, who has given you great advice. Whenever you use a comma, leave space between it and the next word. Welcome to Neo. We hope that you enjoy the family atmosphere and accept the advice of our members and pass on any lessons and advice to the members that you come in contact with when they need it. Great piece, hope to see more from you. Your title is good, the internal logic is good, and it flows smoothly from beginning to end ~ Geezer.

It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

I am looking forward to more of your writing.

This piece is very nice, speaks to loss and wistfulness.

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