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Rejuvination

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lilac petals drop daintily

a swoosh of night air and fragrance
pushes the poplars to samba
swishing and swaying seductively
bouncing droplets of rain on
xylophonic roof tiles
beckoning me to join
this unnamed celebration

I escape my lazy chair ways on
loosey-goose legs
(usually stiff as boardroom banter)
and I feel

....TALL!

Style / type: 
Free verse
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Comments

i just love the 'xylophonic roof tiles' and the 'loosey-goose legs'
just love this whole write

i would like a different title - it seems a bit tame for what i feel when i read the poem...
i kind of like - 'quickening' or 'vitality' - but of course that's just me.

(one typo - fragrence - fragrance)
and 'usually, stiff as boardroom banter' - i don't think you need the comma??

i really like this brittle - nothing to crit
judy
xxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

and the title change
love judy
xxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

poplars doing the samba.........so much better than merely swaying ! I enjoyed and identify with the whole write......scribbler

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