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The Rehabilitation Of A Fundamentalist

there is a monastary
in the woods
no one lives there

the forest had obliterated the sky
and as if "no sky" meant "no God",
all the monks fled.

running to the churches and
cathedrals of the city,
only to find themselves skyless again,

they ran to the desert where it all began,
and finally learned
..."too much sky can be oppressive to Man"....

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Brittle,

"..."too much sky can be oppresive to Man"...."

Loved this ending, and I cannot deny that you may be correct.

--oppressive-- two s's

Really enjoyed this piece . . .!

Victor

"When a pickpocket meets a holy man all he sees are his pockets."

Unknown (at least to me)

thanks. I very much appreciate your feedback and am glad you enjoyed!

thanks for the spelling correction....you guys are beter than spell check!

Al

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trying to see why -
and i think it is the rhyme, nicely hidden but pulling the reader along at the correct pace

interesting write
i really like it al
love judy
xxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

LMAO
Now THIS is good poetry.

Respectfully, Race

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

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Very great write, it made me think of Khalil Gibran, with a beautiful and very clever last line.

"Too much sky can be oppressive to man"

You're very talented, John

I take this to be a write on the need to strike a balance. Neither too much nor too little sky. Had a fable type feel to it. P.S. I liked it lol.....scribbler

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