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REFUGEES

The journalists have done their work
Photographers have captured all
Decency has gone berserk
And brought compassion to a crawl

Now newsprint greased in gasoline
Ignites our souls in immolation
And I burn I burn for amnesia
And offer a crumb to salvation

Children march to a famine death
Bodies explode for god’s greed
I cannot think I cannot breathe
I sit and watch and inside bleed

Life is cheap now like other ages
I can forgive the wicked generations
But not my own whose promised sages
Are numb to grief and all damnation

The journalists have done their job
The cameramen have captured all
Amnesia now infects the mob
And my lamenting O so small

2/2017

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Comments

A poets job is to open eyes and
indeed it seems the world is indifferent
to the suffering of others, a painful
truth.
An important, pertinent and striking
poem Sir ...

thank you for sharing

Richard

p.s. - If there was anything to be
improved upon, I missed it with
the strength of the content and
that is "always" a good thing.

few kings fight battles
maybe street kings
yet the peasants get caught up
flag and country
or for money...education
trades taught
like the military does
at the ultimate cost sometimes

still ongoing....i got raised with protests
riots vietnam..then cold war nuke scare
nuke accident fall of wall in Berlin
and then watched Iraq cnn coverage all day
then aghanistan in seventies russians
then again americans...\
war never ends...its hungry ..needs to be
fed....the blood of innocents..

good poem...very truthful!
sad too...

thank U

W

no critique being offered! Just wanted to say, very much enjoyed this poem. Powerfully delivered.

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Though I am fully female
I could have been a man
yet I was blessed with x and x
as this was good god’s plan

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