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Reflection

Submitted by chevyvent on Thu, 2017-06-22 17:45

A rarity indeed,
Certainly a strange expression this day in June
The sun breathes light upon the newly softened ground
A sunset, awe inspiring, halts me in progress

I reflect, stare, gaze in quiet contemplation
Peace befalls me, calms me, envelops me
In my mind's eye I see memories,
Special times shared

Pink flows to purple
This time, this place slowly fading
Please don't go. But, alas, I know you must
it sets
Turning inward
Sadness

Choices, decisions all done and finished have led me here
here to this place of reflection
Old times gone, right and wrong have led me here,
Here to this place of reflection
certainly a strange expression this day in June
A rarity indeed

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Keith Logan

Fri, 2017-06-23 00:00

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I like and can find no fault. At least not one I can put my finger on. My only slight issue is with "Peace befalls me." I really haven't a clue whether that is good grammar or not. I simply don't come across befalls enough to be sure.

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