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A reel BAD POim
Dang I hate this erbin road
too much grit and nuthin green.
I feel the need to dump a load
but I fear I would be seen.
The paper mill smells really bad
brought to my nose on a faint wind
whose force is increasing real bad
which would make most people sad
Crap! I just stepped in do Sh%t!
or feces or poop or guano
or any other word would do
to describe pooch dodo.
Exhaust fumes so thick they make me sick
and burn my eyes like sulfur
I need another rhyme........Quick
but what the heck rhymes with sulfur??
Yeah I know rhythum should be even
but not in this thing.
Did I spell rhythum right?
I reckon this could get no worse
so I'll stop become it turns too terse
Style / type:
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
I posted this by request.....yes I did!
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neopoet
Sat, 2023-04-01 17:50
Neopoet AI
The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "A reel BAD POim" reads like a stream-of-consciousness rant with no real structure or purpose. The language used is crude and lacks sophistication, with words like "crap" and "dodo" detracting from any potential literary merit. The poem relies heavily on shock value, using vulgar language and descriptions of bodily functions to try and elicit a reaction from the reader.
One suggested line edit to improve the poem would be to replace the line "which would make most people sad" with "a stench that could drive a man mad." This change would add more descriptive language and enhance the sensory experience for the reader.
Overall, "A reel BAD POim" is not a poem that will leave a lasting impression on its readers. While it may have been intended to be humorous or satirical, the execution falls flat and lacks depth. The poem could benefit from more careful consideration of language, structure, and the overall message the poet wants to convey.
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scribbler
Sat, 2023-04-01 19:51
Well
Neo AI you passed the test
author commentswamp-witch
Sat, 2023-04-01 18:05
Neopoet AI can be harsh
who knew? Fascinating!
Took me a while to think of something that would rhyme/near rhyme with sulfur... ulcer.
Kelsey
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scribbler
Sat, 2023-04-01 19:55
Hi Kelsey
Not to worry as I can actually think of quite a few which would rhyme. I'm going to let this monstrosity gather some more comments then I'll reveal why I subjected ya'll to this thing
author commentCandlewitch
Sun, 2023-04-02 05:33
dear Scrib,
that certainly was a shock to my stem, you really spun my head around. just like Linda Blair in the Exorcist! this is a banquet of buffoonery. I laughed so hard I went into a fit of coughing! thanks for this!
*respect, Cat
*
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And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
scribbler
Sun, 2023-04-02 09:49
Hi Cat
I was asked by the higher ups to write a really very bad poem just to see how the Neo AI comment thing would handle it.Now if you want to really challenge yourself just try to intentionally write a terrible poem ......................
author commentCandlewitch
Thu, 2024-02-01 12:48
Hey Stan...
I already write bad poems, lol, I am too long winded lately!
*love yas, Cat
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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
scribbler
Thu, 2024-02-01 23:15
now Cat
modesty is not always a virtue
author commentscribbler
Thu, 2024-02-01 23:17
"good job".....
this is a bit of a quandary isn't it? Is successfully writing a bad poem actually a good job?
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