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in the reeds (by; eddy styx)

there!
among the tender reeds...
she hovers,
an inch beneath
the surface...
brackish water
covers her open eyes.
long hair
spread out like seaweed,
floating
in the brine.
dead eyes
unseeing,
appear to gaze
into mine.
I wonder
how she got here
did she take her own life?
or did someone
snuff out her fragile light?
was she some man's wife?
now youth eternal,
frozen
on her face.
perhaps someone's daughter
brought to the brink
not a clue
left behind.
in time,
to the bottom...
her body will sink
as the bloating gas

dissipates

and gravity
pulls her down...

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Free verse
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*eddy styx is my malevolent, MALE alter ego who writes dark poetry. thanks for reading and commenting. *(the cat)
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Comments

Hi Cat, another rather gruesome one by eddie styx. I sometimes wish people who write short lines would join some together, so that I don't have to scroll up and down several times to get the picture right. Sorry, but I like to fit the poem to the section of the screen I'm looking at.
I'll return, I honestly haven't understood it all, tho' I scrolled down about 5 times. Perhaps I'm just dim...lol. Best, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

You've gone soft sir? Are you wondering what happened to this women? You didn't have anything to do with it? I have to wait to hear more but personally think your imagery to be wonderfully visual I'm just wondering who.did it? lol no way it was me!

Thank you...Teddy

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