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The Rectitude I Thought I Had

To have been thinking all this time
Misconceiving all I've seen

Now realizing that all this time
How innocent and green I've been

For neither thought I had possessed
Had rectitude within it's bind

And sad how I so firmly pressed
All this rubbish in my mind

For as the sun had risen by
And told me how the world is true

Bamboozled was, please clarify
How all these thoughts I thought were true...

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I wrote this poem describing the aha! moments we all experience. Let me know what you think! Thank you for reading!
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Welcome to the site. I enjoyed your poem,
and love it when I have to look up a word.

I just wanted to ask a question about the
poem. Internal logic;
"For neither thought I had possessed"
Only two?
"All this rubbish in my mind"
Seems more than two?

Also, your first three lines end in
"all", two having the same exact
ending, just seems to be repetitive
and not implemented as a tool, just
a bit jarring ... but this is one man's

Loved the content and the rhyme scheme.


Had to look up rectitude to be sure that what i was thinking it meant, was at least somewhat in the right direction.....i was pretty close...which to me tells you're other words were well chosen! You sound as though you weren't in the best of places when you wrote this, so I'm hoping it was in some way it was cathartic. I like how it's structured in couplets as it makes for an easy read. I do feel your use of the word 'all' is a bit over done. For example, in the 2nd line of the first couplet, instead of 'all'....maybe try 'the things I've seen.' And then as you read through the rest, see if there are other words you might use without changing your thoughts. It sounds as though there are many things you feel you've been deceived by, so maybe instead of 'neither' try 'those,' which lends itself to include the bunch of stuff, (I seem to lack of a better way of expressing what I mean at the moment, but hope you get my drift?!) that have you feeling this way.
These are just a couple thoughts on the technical side I'm simply suggesting. Long story short, I did enjoy the read and hope at some point you find peace within yourself and feel 'less bamboozled' by whatever has caused you to feel this way. I know I've been disillusioned by what I've thought was true and then found out, I had it wrong! With all the craziness we hear on the news that's happening in todays world, well enough said........


All criticism very constructive and Yes! i will take your suggestions to heart as i have not taken them lightly! thanks for reading!

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