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Recess

Submitted by William Saint George on Tue, 2012-03-20 20:08

My breath is poor,
My poetry stale,

I heard my ship mates:
"Sink or bail!"

I'll take a long rest
From my versed travails,

And hope to lie fallow
While all else avails.

If I don't recover,
Don't lose hope and wail,

So long as I breathe,
I shall yet prevail.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
I'm on a break. Critique, and wish me luck/give advice/be nice.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Geezer

Tue, 2012-03-20 20:40

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We need all the good poets we can get, and you are that! i am a big fan of rhyme. You always come up with some good ones. ~ Gee

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William Saint George

Tue, 2012-04-10 12:37

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Won't be long Geezer. And I'll always look to neopoet for more inspiration.

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