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REBEL

Submitted by Twizzle48 on Sun, 2023-01-08 06:06

REBEL

When forced into harsh compliance
What soon emerges is sheer defiance
Upon which stance I have no reliance
I value freedom, it’s my way or none
With no other option under the sun
Yet some rules do offer a certain value

It is mainly about who knows better
If orders are just followed to the letter
Those succumbing couldn’t be wetter
When taking no personal responsibility
Often hiding their sheer lack of ability
Tell me, do any rules offer any value

Resistance is futile, so the saying goes
Yet principles matter, from head to toes
If not those in power, who really knows
The common man has real perspective
Considering the worth of each directive
Rejecting the rules if they have no value

So, my principled brethren on the march
It’s too early yet to build a victory arch
Loose collars please, not stiff with starch
We need a different kind of organisation
That really deserves genuine celebration
We can make new rules that do have value

Style / type:

Structured: Western

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Not actively editing

Contest:

Neopoem Of The Week January 8th to January 14th 2023

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Candlewitch

Sun, 2023-01-08 07:16

hello,

this is as good a rant as I've ever heard!

*hugs, Cat

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Geezer

Sun, 2023-01-08 10:17

I couldn't agree more...

Cat has it right. This is as good a rant as I've ever heard about rules and regulations, and how they stifle us all with petty B.S.
Nice job! ~ Geez.
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Rosewood Apothecary

Mon, 2023-01-09 04:35

Are you a comrade?

This sounds like labor party propaganda and I’m infatuated. Obviously it’s got great rhythm and rhyme. As a highly skilled tradesmen who still does most of his own manual labor, I’m pretty Marxist. Like I look at the print, I order the materials. The logging company, sawmill, lumber yard, lumber salesman(who can’t even do a materials take off on a home build) all take a piece of the profit made on every stick of lumber. I don’t make money off the lumber. I’m the one who plans the entire project including babysitting the architects who like to spend extra money on unnecessary materials. Get your hands out of the cookie jar.

Do the least amount of work and collect the most amount of pay.
This is the model of the American capitalist way.
Find someone to do it cheaper regardless of quality
Money is the cost of your absent morality.

Tim

RoseBlack

Fri, 2023-01-13 17:43

I agree with all of the above

A rant well written. Good job!

~RoseBlack~

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REBEL