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A Reason

There in the hush of the evening
I will be thinking of you.
Why can’t I let you go?
Keeping, is gentle on my soul.

I must not say the reason why
I will keep you till the day I die
Then in the glow of the after time
We will be joined again, just one mind,

With your hand in mine.
I see your smile light up the world
In that warmth of time.
Belonging to both of us.

I have to leave here once more,
But believe that in another world
I shall wait at the open door
To join in the twirls, for all to see

No need for hands we shall both be
A beauty that is our eternity
I know that we will be just fine
Two Spirits yours and mine.

One day before we have to journey on
I would just love to hear three words
From you to me, as we are both free.
Tethered by our own morality.

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I have no suggestion. This is poignantly beautiful. Thank you for sharing your soul with us all.

Love always Jaughter x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Wonderful to have you visit us here, memories and influences that touch another soul, as they journey on this plain.
Love to you as always my Jaughter.
Yours Ian xx

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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

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