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Realized or Not

If the rain were dreams to be found,
step out in them and let them surround.
Because without them I don't find my life worth living,
I need to make dreams reality and disprove the idea that they were misgiving.

I know that I need to do all that it takes,
But all isn't enough for you, given the stakes.
Perhaps we can put past this petty ignorance,
Live for each other, freed of our arrogance.
I dream and I dream to crush all my doubt,
Because deep down I know your heart is devout.

So you storm through my heart and into my head,
especially when we are warm safe in bed.
And I dream of temptations not easily shed,
I crush them and kill them to dream of just you instead.

Your touch, and your love and your kiss is all that I covet,
I am human like others but I think that you love it,
That I look past the face and the smile,
and dig down to see if youre ever in denial.

If you need me to wipe your eyes when youre depressed,
when the world has crushed us both and were compressed,
You only need to find yourself in reach of my fingertips.
If you ever feel like I am too far away,
Then come within reach of my lips...

If the end ever comes for us,
Till death do we part.
If I am the one to go,
There will always be a place next to me in the earth for you...
If it is not me, and you who departs,
I'll have lost my lifes best part...

When the rain let's up,
And the dreams slip to reality or turn out to be good intentions never to see the day,
What's left over will be the best thing in my life to ever be right.
At the end of the day regardless of how it is...
you will always be my Light.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
These, I'm sorry to say won't be realized...but at the time it was all possible.
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I think that this could be a good piece if you hadn't rushed the ideas past my eyes and confused my thoughts.
Dreams are good as is the theme, then there is the reality, now there is a mix here that you need to separate.
Maybe this would make two poems but will leave that up to you, but that can be easily done by putting sub heading in such as dream and awak, keep writing, Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

You write good verse but you are not god.

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