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reality or dream
sometimes i feel things i have experienced are like a movies or plays unreal reality.
especially relationships 'they say they love you alot' but they never marred you.
i beleive this is because we have more than one soulmate; most people some only one
its like your picking apples; that look good like theoutside of experiences' but some have worms
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Free verse
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Last few words:
i am reaching out to others who have had experiences like this
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Comments
Ray Whitaker
Fri, 2022-10-07 17:26
What makes this a prose poem?
I really don't understand the form.
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victor dyck
Fri, 2022-10-07 19:56
reality or dream
you worry too much about syntax instead of what i am saying
author commentRay Whitaker
Sat, 2022-10-08 19:04
No, it isn’t syntax.
Just do not understand the form. It looks like you are writing a note to your family member that is away overseas.
Where is the allegory, the illusion, the metaphor? Where is the rhythm inherit that resembles a poem in a stanza form? Where are the note poetic overtones within its meter, repetition, and choice of language?
I have studied prose poetry form, and I do understand the definition as stated on Poetic websites, and formal Creative Writing texts.
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