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The genuineness of life.... emerges only when one sees.... with open eyes --------the world is a cruel place.... for young innocent ones.
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Oncoming Autumn Leaves

Those fading autumn leaves
remind me of my teens...
they say autumn comes
after spring and summer
but my autumn came ere
much ere
ahead of my spring,
as pre teens
they tried to snatch my virginity
saying sweety
we love thee
and
did bare their wanton souls
to devour mine
sad for them, they couldn’t succeed
and I was spared
to understand they went gay
as they couldn’t
in front of a smiley ones’ smile stand
they failed
but twas attempted blasphemy

what an autumn twas?

ere the summer of memories
I happily fortunately remained green
but
burned scars I had seen
they still burn me in between.....

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A bad dream state or reality of a sad youth, there in lies the confusion, just a few tweaks and make it so.
A good write young Bard, the theme is a strong one so this should excel.
Yours Ian..

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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

yeah many have liked it
thanks Ian
you do as usual

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