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They singers,
must be good
never heard

but get out of the dungeons
into a lightened world

sing praises yet unheard
of those birds'
empty walls would love to hear
from singers poets like you

come out into the open
sing never worry
they all sang a million times
before they were heard
you also will...

come out from the darkness
to broad daylight
this is just a mad world

SILENCE
Yes the silence of a dark night
makes it an eerie experience

even birds sing in tones
low
owls coo softly

they sleep with open eyes
your silence we all surmise

emanates from the health of an ailing angel
may the silence be soothing

as night falls by
dreams may come
as a healing

as meditation does to some
during day light
silence comes to some
as dark as night

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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I like it.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

haven't you noticed
I am fading away slowly
from neo

but tell me where to go

author comment

sure, I give you are hard time at times but you're a big boy and know I always have a reason.

And your gems are worth waiting for. If there are any of your works in particular you would like my feedback on PM me, but not all of them, I can't possibly keep up with your profligacy.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

one or two of recent origin
shall find and let u know
as PM
thanks master
you are brilliant

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Better that you fade a little if you are going to write such good pieces, Loved it..
One Crit take out those damned and's and let it flow as it can.
Take care young Bard as always,
Yours Ian..

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