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Rainbow at twilight possibly

Submitted by lovedly on Sat, 2016-06-04 13:39

I have yet to see a rainbow at night
rainbows are distortions
of sun light white
and
very bright
with seven colours in sight

as in VIBGYOR
all know less or more

violet indigo blue green yellow orange and red
all the above to make sure

'tis a rainbow of yore
and can happen
just as the rains cease
and
sun comes up once more
then alone 'tis a rainbow
that nature does ensure

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing - rough draft

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vandiemenspeak

Sat, 2016-06-04 22:24

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I would never dream of.. a breath of fresh air Lovedly. We always learned it as ROYGBIV in school, and I imagined a giant in the sky called "Roy" was the one who made the rainbows! Ah to be five again ;)

Thanks.

Chris.

Chris Hall - Tasmania

Grossbooted draymen rolled barrels dullthudding out of Prince's stores and bumped them up on the brewery float. On the brewery float bumped dullthudding barrels rolled by grossbooted draymen out of Prince's stores.

lovedly

Sun, 2016-06-05 00:37

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we all must also love Roy
but in my ancient times 'twas
VIBGYOR
7 COLOURS
YOR
U CAN REMEMBER AS
ROY
BUT THE SEQUENCE IN RAINBOW COLOURS WILL CHANGE
YOUNG SCHOOL
ROY BOY
Welcome to my maiden domain
a fan of yours I shall
always remain

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jane210660

Sun, 2016-06-05 03:14

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Hi Lovedly.
We always learnt it with ROYGBIV
and the nemonic Richard Of York Gave Battle In Vain
Funny isn't it how things round the world are the same and different.
I like this poem very much. Jx

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lovedly

Sun, 2016-06-05 08:30

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man is never the same
nor sane
days come and go

Roys too are born
as what they call it....
you now know

Jane thanks to you
come oftener will you

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