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Rain and You (Sonnet No. 1)

~ RAIN AND YOU (Sonnet No. 1) ~
From: a Trilogy of English Sonnets

Rain teems down and 'gainst my window lashes.
So I think of you as teared raindrops fall.
Sent here to earth in splishy cool splashes,
A waterfall on my small cottage wall.

My thoughts turn to you, though I know not why,
I think and wonder, are you safe within?
Wishing, hoping that you're cozy and dry,
Chestnutty warm from your toes to your chin.

But now survey! the rainy wet has lifted
The ground is damped, but not so up aloft.
The blue breaks through although clouds have drifted
To leave a landscape newly, fleshy soft.

Bless the day becoming clear and brightly
Sprinkling dewdrop daylight ~ gently, lightly.

ASJ

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I have writ a trilogy of sonnets to more or less finish off my 2019 year. Hopefully they may each be read as a separate sonnet or read together as a trilogy. I will post one per day, I hope that you enjoy them.
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Very good. I can relate. Love it!

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