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Rage Rider by: eddy styx

Rage Rider

I am a Rage Rider
a fellow madman,
a night strider
alone on my own.

I like to test
my metal nightly
I am the best
at what I do.

my black muscle car
and I fly low in town
keeping it under the radar
I'm everyone's nightmare.

a trusty rod at my side
to deal with a-hole drivers
whom I simply cannot abide,
better they should stay home in safety

I do what I do for thrills
I'm a king rage rider,
and it is a clashing of wills
only one can win the title of... Rage Rider!

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eddy styx is my MALE, murderous alter ego who writes dark poetry. I put my rage on the page. the fourth line in the fourth section doesn't sit well with me would appreciate some help.
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Oh Sis, I want to be Rage Rider.

I think I want to be eddy too!

I just so enjoy the eddy poetry, its always dark, sinister & devilishly graphic.

Can we expect a book of styx three anytime soon?

Does this line sound right?

"of whom which I cannot abide"

seems wrong but being eddy, he can write what he likes.

The opening stanza- "I am a Rage Rider
a fellow madman,
a night strider
alone on my own."

really sets the scene.

Regards

One

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"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"

you are right, there is something wrong about that line... and YOU ARE the Rage Rider. could use some help on that line if you have the time.

ever, eddy

p.s.

working on book 3

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"of whom which I cannot abide"

who I simply can't abide

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regards

One

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"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"

with One. A very good piece! The advice he gave you, would have been mine, if I had gotten there first! LoL Haven't been feeling my best the last few days, so I have been late in getting to my post. Ha! [A little joke there]. Man, I must be sick to resort to that kind of humor. Anyway, great write! Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
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they have a few free minutes?

I had a feeling that something might be wrong, due to your absence from Neopoet. I know it hasn't been long, but with regulars you notice their patterns. I hope you feel better soon. I will light a white candle and wish for your good health.

I'm glad you liked the poem. thank you for your insightful reviews, I appreciate it.

ever, eddy

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very much. ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

are you feeling better today? I let the candle burn all day.

*hugs, Cat

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I am feeling better today! Thank you. I missed being here this morning, because I had to get up early to get the car from my stepson and drop him off to work.[6:45] and then had to take the wife shopping and get my new phone integrated with my network. [[$30] and the headache of learning a new phone. Thank you for the healing prayers and the candle, it must have helped, headache is gone. ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

Great, glad to hear that you are better...I was worried. I hate shopping and all the hassle of it. I'll only shop on line, with Steve's help, lol!

*hugs, Cat
ever, eddy

"hello" from Steven

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@funmzy

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whole heartedly!

ever, eddy
&
*hugs, Cat

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