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in the rage of reality

Slowly it bubbled and seethed
rolling around my psyche
leaving magenta trails of rage
that were slick to the switch

I traveled a thousand paths
and read a million books,
elusively 'it' remained veiled
burning the lava heating my rage

I wore a domino and understood
nothing of your world,
living in a reality so skewed
it warped, buckling it imploded

in the debris among the questions
I laid in silent fury, breaking nails,
and peeling at the veneer of this mystery
I found an onion with a million layers

my search ceased as sanity fell
the novel idea of knowing vanished,
and now I no longer need to know
I release you from our undertaking

searching for the answer
I performed alchemy
I am now magically unleashed
on a windblown night

forever is moving forward
I go with it into the ether

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at the right length too. The theme is consistent. the title relevant.

Thanks for sharing.
In ink,
David

I'm still not finished with this one I am getting some help with it, I want it to say a certain thing and its not quite doing it for me yet

I appreciate the read and the comment

love Jayne xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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enjoyed it so much
I now enjoy
mostly metaphors

loved

Glad you enjoyed it Loved ...

love Jayne x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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enjoyed it so much
I now enjoy
mostly metaphors

loved

Liked this piece, reality, I just wonder what it is???
The voyage through the ether, the state of being in a physical body, being a spirit in a reality world.
"I think therefore I am" someone once said but only to make themselves of a higher level. Probably didn't work. lol
I wonder why a parrot puts his/her head on one side appearing to listen don't you have to have the ability to think to do this.
I was shown a field in thought once by a little girl, and there laying together were many creatures, and I did ask how this came about, the answer I got was that all things are equal in the end.
I love to look at the rose from the inside and ride on butterfly wings, they are all reality and you captured the feelings so well.
I seemed to need more than you gave though, as if you had opened a door and said look what is in this room.
Thanks young lady, your sight is thoughtful, Yours Ian XX

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Your so right, I have opened a door and taken a peek in I have so much I have had to say but in a sense been handcuffed from opening up there is no restraint now, my stories are going to be many and not all of them are going to be peaceful joyous rides....

There is a article on the net at the moment and they say they think that a scientist has proof the universe is a hologram, lol what is reality indeed, there is also another famous professor who is sprouting that our consciousness doesn't die when the psychical body dies instead moving on reintegrating with the universe I will find that article and send it, I think you will be very interested to read it, I will have a look for it in the morning for you

my love always Jayne xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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the vocal power is inescapable.

It is sufficiently esoteric to be entrancing and raw to be bruised.
https://soundcloud.com/jess-tapper/audio-recording-on-saturday-1

cheers,
Jess
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You never fail to give me goose bumps, thank you so much for the read it is appreciated and saved

had to listen a few times that's a great reading

love Jayne x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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Much has already been said about this poem. It took me through the labyrinths of the processes the psyche goes through before coming to terms with reality and letting go of the negativity like taking off the niggling thorn and getting back the spring in the stride. The choice of words is thoughtful and expressive. I hope this has worked as a therapy to get out of the rut of self doubt, mystery, confusion, self inflicted guilt etc.as it seems to a reader...thanks for posting...

much love and hugs...

raj (sublime_ocean)

it was a type of therapy but it was also a kind of wandering of the mind, in a little bit of a pissed off state at certain aspects of life, I am really glad you enjoyed it hun I am going to explore this a little more its a ways from being finished

thanks for the visit and your thoughts

love and biggest hugs Jayne xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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I don't know how I missed this one out with that title. Even though the theme is anger this piece is grand indeed. i can sense the fury in every verse. its raw and powerful emotion like volcanic explosion of words which demanded to be heard. Kudos to you, hun.

love and hugs
Alid

I am very happy you liked this one hun :) I am still working on it though I will return to it shortly

love and hugs Jayne xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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