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Rage

Covered by a a blanket of rage,
my heart knows no forgiveness.
I condemn the author of my pain
who has shred my life into pieces.

Cursed be the drunk driver who left me bleeding
after he rammed my future into a living nightmare.
No amount of cash can return my broken dreams!
The good life I painted in my mind is no longer there

I breathe but my legs are dead, devoid of feeling.
I won't be able to stand or walk anymore!
My tears are gone but my heart can't stop crying
Dear God, I no longer know what my life is for!

If I find the scum who has hurt me,
I will spat on his face and wished him dead
for he has taken a big part of me
that I can never get back.

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and articulate Khalid.
I too condemn those careless drivers. When I drive my car, I very much fear the accidents, I fear not the loss of my life but others'.
Thank you for sharing. Hope the persona you are refering to is not one of those your close relatives or friends.

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I'm attempting to be one of the voices to speak out for the victims of these drunk drivers. Even if the drivers are genuinely sorry, they can never undo the damage they have done.

Alid

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