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A Quintessence Of Verse

much of this world is dear to poet dreamers.
As crazy lovers of prosody listen in to the quintessence of verse,
then a bright and dancing word verve must ignite the mental quixotic sea of dazzling swirling poem-birth..
I recollect the impossible town of my birth and I idolise the veins of our dear and daring poem dead..,
May the eternal God come home soon because a sea of angels is now eating at my versing vamping poetic honey tree..

something inside of me also speaks of brevity
we can make an ellaborate chemistry
as we struggle with the innate mystery
of the way things should be
golden nuggets of mere brilliance
a human soul permeates through the path
to touch the gazed eyes that drift and look away
onto lucid dreams filled with hay

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Great word choices here and a good message.

If I could make a few suggestions, I think the poem should end with the line "of the way things should be". Maybe consider moving the remaining lines to the beginning of that stanza? I also think it would help the flow and appearance of the poem if the 3 really long lines in the first stanza were broken up a little bit. I think making them more like the lengths of all the other lines would give this poem some needed symmetry.

Hope this helps,
Kelsey

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I respect you thank you dear

Mario Vitale

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Love is a choice my friend & soon you will discover. Others attract to you from your warm embrace. Love is patient & kind. There's different kinds of love to such as, "Agape" meaning friendship. You can find love in a lonesome child as he embraces their toy. Still it comes down to the matter of your heart. Love never fails, it always protects, always trusts, always hopes, always perseveres. It is not rude, it is not self seeking, it is not easily angered, it keeps no record of wrongs. Love is met at a wedding of a beloved man & wife. God's love is the great eternal constant amidst the daily inconsistencies of your daily walk with him. God alone is enough. Share love with others especially your enemies cause you'll all be richer for it. Light & Love ( Mario William Vitale ).

Mario Vitale

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