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Questions (Rhyme Patterns Workshop)

A few things I have the right to know:
Where do birds sleep at night?
I mean, where in the world do they all go?
I've checked out trees in the daylight -
there aren't enough nests for every bird in sight.

Why didn't the Great Eagles of Middle-Earth
deliver the Ring to the fires of Mount Doom?
Poor Frodo and Sam put aside their own worth
fighting the evil that would nearly consume
the goodness of all, until it was cast to its tomb.

Why does my mind believe I can still kneel
to pull the weed from the hardened ground?
The body is weak, but the mind has its zeal
to bend and twist without making a sound,
to accomplish feats of strength, so profound.

How can global hunger still be so widespread?
How does aspirin work, who owns the sea?
Red-Bellied Woodpecker's bellies have hardly any red -
what's with their name? What's a "lifetime" guarantee?
Who do I ask in case I ever feel the need to disagree?


Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
ababb rhyme pattern.
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content


This workshop has been challenging, but fun!
Thank you very much!

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Hello Lavender,
Well done for the spot-on rhyming within a tricky scheme.

And I love the humour of the questions and the exasperation of the narrator.
Although, the third verse seems like a departure - dwelling on personal issues that are less engaging for the reader.

keep on at it...................PJ

Thank you for reading and commenting!

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Questions indeed. we all have the questions but few have the answers. the rhyme scheme is precise and unforced.
On an aside I have a novel about 3/4 complete with your same title lol

Enjoying your workshop! Best wishes with your novel!
Thank you!

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Hopefully we all will learn something

I think it's a good reflection of the mix of trivial and serious thoughts that float around in our heads. The rhyme's fine. I think it could be cleaned up a bit in terms of rhythm.

Always good to simplify and tidy up! I will take a fresh look and pull it in a bit.
Thank you!

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Thank you for all your consideration and great thought! I will look this over. I may not keep "naked", but I definitely like where you are heading with it!

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You have inspired me!

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I had not read before, but enjoyed it just now! If I understand correctly, a poem referring to his young daughter's inquisitive mind. Wonderful!
Thank you!

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