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The queer quiet quail

The queer quiet quail
try’s to trot
along the
tremendous
tender trail
towards tranquility.
But this sick
prejudice society
of the
forest won’t let him
have the ability.
they know he’s different so in
their minds they
don’t see him as
one of their
kind . But rather
as a enigma
and
because of that
they send the
owl that loves to
prowl into
ones personal
private life.
Then stab the quail
in the back
by exploiting
It’s private life
to the
rapscallion
wolfs and
making them howl
horrendous
language .That sends the
quail to now trot
on the new
trail towards insanity.

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I see the purpose in this poem and won't comment on the content, but
but will on your typos. I know that English isn't your primary language
so it's understandable that you make mistakes. With no further
explanation here goes.

Tries not [try's]
Wolves is the pural of wolf

I'm not sure of the form that you wrote in made you leave some capital letters in the middle of thoughts or it is just a
part of the way you wanted it to appear, but I would do it like this:

The queer quiet quail
Tries to trot
Along the
Tremendous
Tender trail
But this sick
Prejudiced Society
Of the forest
Won't let him have the ability
They know he's different
So in their minds
They don't see him as one of their kind
But rather an enigma
Because of that
They send the owl
Who loves to prowl into one's personal life

I think that you can see how to do the rest of it.
Try it and see if it doesn't make it easier to read.
~ Geez.
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No auto correct kept capitalizing some words

And I’m American I was born in Virginia .

Thank you I hope your doing fine in this time of mass hysteria.

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

author comment

Oooh, this is really, really good. Packs a punch of meaning and I love your structure with its short bursts and constant alliteration. Well writ! (also, would like to agree with Geezer and add that punctuation (at least periods) would make reading easier ;D)
~

"To reveal art and conceal the artist is art's true aim." Oscar Wilde

“If one hears bad music though shall drown it out in conversation “ Oscar Wilde the picture of Dorian gray
Thank you I hope your doing fine in this horrid time of mass hysteria.

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

author comment

today's virus is just another
BACTERIA
popula---shun
equalizer
like once was Malaria

It is still the cause of this mass hysteria and paranoia

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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