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The Queen of Hearts...

A curvaceous body hid
her frozen, cold steel heart
The warmth of imagination
disguised that awful part

Though there was no intention
he felt the steady draw
of lips and hips to his
and thought about the law

As he first felt desire
rise up in his veins
the thought of sin and punishment
said he was insane

She redoubled all her efforts
made him want her more
Her skin was warm and soft
she thrilled him to his core

Each time that she pursued him
touched his manly frame
He forgot about propriety
he didn't feel the shame

Her downfall came about
because she didn't care
she showed flashes of her heart
showed the steel was there

She bragged about her conquest
made comments of his smarts
She took pride in his lonely fall
she was the Queen of Hearts

The Queen of Hearts can't love you
because there is no room
'cause love of self, fills her heart
Your love for her is doomed

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This is an awesome write. I think the rhythm and rhyme are spot on. She's a deadly kind of love in a way because you'll never get something from someone who's love of self overall trumps everything. Absolutely cracking write!!..

I think it's a winner.

Love and higgliest bugs Sis xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

I felt the presence of a woman that I once knew a long time ago; actually, I dreamt about her. I'm not sure why, but it was very vivid, and I knew right away, that I should run away as fast as I could. She tried to follow me, and I jumped into a person's car at a stop-light and told the startled driver to hurry up and get me out of there, I was in danger for my life. The guy dropped me off at an intersection where he said he had to turn and that was the end of the dream! Weird huh? I sat down and wrote this in about a half-hour, edits and all. Thanks for the read and comments. ~ Geez.
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Women can be wicked and the downfall of many a good man. I really liked this

~RoseBlack~

''I'm ACE OF SPADES ...''..
All posts I've held
now one day Paul will say
Gee hold the Fort any day
as it is you mightily with all poets play
so why should anyone dismay

I'm going on a holiday
Long VACATION be it may
Hi and Bye
Geez
no spring in 2023

I hope it is someplace nice and warm, with white, sandy beaches and cocktail bars, holding reggae bands that play well into the night. A nice vacation for a man so sick of winter. I'll be waiting to hear all about it when you come back! ~ Geez.
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