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Psapfo 4 & 5

The hem of her skirts
mouth of the Aegean

the scent of her hair
divine honeyed apples

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The sun is dismissed
from the sky

Afroditi kisses
the ankles of Psapfo

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Hello, Dalton,
Another beauty about Psapfo. I studied a very condensed history of Aphrodite. The first line of the site I went to stated the she "rises from the foam of the waves of the sea..." What a perfect start to your poem. I also much like the reference to her hair scented like "divine honeyed apples" after reading of the Golden Apple being one of her symbols. And then of course it led to the Ode to Aphrodite written by Sappho, herself. I will need to study a bit more to fully understand Sappho, but she is very intriguing. It seems to understand her better, one needs to realize there are layers and layers to Greek mythology.
Thank you!
L

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I will never truly understand why people like or dislike the poems I try to write thanks for your comment John :)

Lavender is a nice name

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